Post by Claire Blakely on May 20, 2014 22:52:28 GMT
We should have all seen the rules, and therefore that one is "no powerplaying". But what does powerplaying look like? and how can we say what we want to say without actually doing so? Here are some examples of powerplaying and the fixed version of it. They aren't real, if that's what you think.
Jet Marcus growled and lashed his tail in annoyance. "I don't care!" he screeched, lunging at Claire Blakely and raking his gleaming claws down her grey-white snow leopard flank. Claire yowled and ran off, blood streaming down her fur.
Try it like this:
Jet Marcus growled and lashed his tail in annoyance. "I don't care!" he screeched, lunging at Claire Blakely and attempted to rake his gleaming claws down her grey-white snow leopard flank and hoped she yowled and ran off, blood streaming down her fur.
Don't state fact, state an Inference or a hope.
Kevin Jake walked into the woods, Adam Griffin close on his heels. When they got to the forest, he shifted into a wolf and started running, and Adam followed close behind.
Try it like this:
Kevin Jake walked into the woods, Adam Griffin probably close on his heels and waited for him when he got to the forest, he shifted into a wolf and started running, with Adam, who should be following close behind.
Yes you are making inferences, but that may not be what the character is doing.
If you still have questions, ask one of our lovely staff
So basically, don't control other people's perspective
Jet Marcus growled and lashed his tail in annoyance. "I don't care!" he screeched, lunging at Claire Blakely and raking his gleaming claws down her grey-white snow leopard flank. Claire yowled and ran off, blood streaming down her fur.
Try it like this:
Jet Marcus growled and lashed his tail in annoyance. "I don't care!" he screeched, lunging at Claire Blakely and attempted to rake his gleaming claws down her grey-white snow leopard flank and hoped she yowled and ran off, blood streaming down her fur.
Don't state fact, state an Inference or a hope.
Kevin Jake walked into the woods, Adam Griffin close on his heels. When they got to the forest, he shifted into a wolf and started running, and Adam followed close behind.
Try it like this:
Kevin Jake walked into the woods, Adam Griffin probably close on his heels and waited for him when he got to the forest, he shifted into a wolf and started running, with Adam, who should be following close behind.
Yes you are making inferences, but that may not be what the character is doing.
If you still have questions, ask one of our lovely staff
So basically, don't control other people's perspective
